Overall:

  -Dialogue: Make dialogue flow better and more natural

  -Descriptions: Make more specific in some sections, more imaginative in others

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  -Rework Iradel's description

  -Rework Zerital's description

  -Rework Wyrm's Perch/Aria description

  -Characters: Revisit early Trenton, Kiva, Millie, Raligoth, and overall Karfice characterization

  -Scenes: Give some sections more room to breathe; expand or make some fights more unique

  -Revisit Wyrm's Perch escape sequence

  -Revisit storming of salamander temple

  -Revisit Chapter 81: Tower of Wonders

  -Revisit start of "Avar" chapter