Long story short I'm extremely unsatisfied with the story as it is, even with all the revisions I made. So I'm ending this here, maybe, just maybe I'll pick it up from scratch again but I wouldn't hold your breath.
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On the bright side, I'm thinking of starting another (different) story and I intend to do a better job with it. More planning, more details and a better lain plot.