ok so i need some opinions on how i should take this story. obviously Zach is going to be op to a ridiculous extent but i kinda feel like im going too fast or my writing is crappy. if you have ideas please let me know. i have an end goal but the details are where im getting lost. i will finish this story however so no need to worry there. now is the time my friends. let me know your thoughts. also do you think i should introduce more non humans in the story? i kinda feel like nonhumans are better and i should make Zach seem like an evil guy to humans because he favors beasts or something like that.

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  also should i add even more op abilities or should i add a character that is the bumbling baffoon that makes everything more difficult. should i keep the quirky attitude that the narrator has?